British person -- word choice help, please?

[chicken]

I'm writing my ats_endofdays story at the last second, and need a beta. Anyone? Pretty please? I'll beta anything back for you if that helps.

Also, I need a British person to give me advice on word choice (this is for something Wesley would say). Americans would say something like, "Of course there will be a pay RAISE," but I thought I heard a British person say in some movie a phrase more like, "Of course there will be a pay RISE."

Is this right? Or is there some third option?

Thanks in advance.

Comments

[wardenda.livejournal.com]

I can beta. And I believe the British say either one, so both are acceptable.

Also, Adam misses his Tommy.

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Go to: http://carole.fates.org/harmony.html and thanks in advance for your comments.

Tommy misses his Adam, too. Don't worry, eventually I'll get back on the horse.

[wardenda.livejournal.com]

"Back on the horse"? So that's what the kids are calling it now....

1. You NAILED Harmony's character.

2. How does a vamp get a hangover?

3. Walrus blood: NICE.

4. And all this time, I thought the extra ingredient was love.

I liked this, a bit gross with all the blood, but that's just me. Very nicely done. :)

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

1. Thanks. I tried hard to get her 'voice' right.

2. I don't know HOW vamps get hangovers, I just know that they do -- Spike in Lover's Walk, Harmony in Harm's Way, etc.

3. Walrus blood: nice and FUNNY. I am going for the funny here, yes. :-) Thanks.

4. Haha. Yes, we wish.

Thanks for the comments. I really, really wish you'd found something wrong with it, because when betas tell me there is nothing wrong, it sounds too good to be true.

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

P.S. The Walrus blood was Ellie's idea. She is a genius. Genius.

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

And also, yet, it is a bit gross with all the blood, but I wanted to see what it would all be like from a vampire's perspective. They sadly do think about it a whole lot.

[maryavatar.livejournal.com]

It would be 'rise'. If you have the word 'pay' it would almost always be 'rise', 'raise' would only be used if the word 'pay' was absent.

'Raise' is occasionally used, but it's the more modern version, for example:

"If I'm going to be doing extra work, I want a pay rise."

or

"If I'm going to be doing extra work, I want a raise."

Wes tends to be very traditional in his word choices, so he'd probably use the first version.

[maryavatar.livejournal.com]

Oooh, I almost forgot. I don't beta, but I do offer a Britishing service, for writers who have a British character and want to be sure the dialogue is accurate.

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Go to http://carole.fates.org/harmony.html.

It's mostly all Harmony's internal thoughts, almost no dialogue at all, but Wesley does have a few lines here and there. I'd be grateful if you were to correct his speech.

[maryavatar.livejournal.com]

Yup, it all looks good. You've even managed to get that slightly stilted speech pattern that the upper classes have. Well done.

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much, although the slightly stilted is probably an accident, a result of the fact that I myself speak in a sadly stilted manner. !

[chicken-cem.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. That is pretty much what I suspected, but I wanted proof. :-)